Original: It doesn’t matter what someone is wearing or how they are acting, no one asks to be raped because people who sexually assault often use force, threat, or injury. An absence of injuries does not indicate the victim consented. (From Sexual Violence Myth and Misconception)

Rewritten: Unfortunately, society’s opinion on sexual assault, that dressing in a specific way allows one to commit such crimes, is wrong because no one wants to be put in such a situation because rapists use aggression and force, which is not pleasant.

It gets to the point in the original statement by discussing what victims wear and how it doesn’t matter. In the rewritten version, it begins with a word that states that it is bad news, that society judges sexual assault victims based on what they wear. This syntax allows readers to connect emotionally with victims in order to help them by opposing society’s irrational ideas. Then, it explains why it is irrational by stating that rapists use force and aggressiveness.

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